Something new: Poetry

STaLK3R · Post by **STaLK3R** » 13 Mar 2004, 17:54

I don't ever remember seeing a poetry thread here, so I thought I'd see how one would do. As they say, just a test...

So here you can post your own poetry (don't use someone else's work!) and the rest of us can give opinions and suggestions on the posted poems.

Feel free to post any written work too. And, just my luck, I have a couple of poems that I wish to share. Here we go... And I'm only 16, don't crucify me!

Death â€“ No reason to live

Depression, pain and anxiety
The concoction of death itself
Endless twists leading to disaster
Strangling the life from hopeless victims
Switching from one target to the next

Feeding on countless numbers of helpless souls
Plastic needles prickling their skin
An injection of misery and filth
Choking on the chain of reality
Unmet expectations and endless obstacles

Perplexing unanswered questions
Sucking out hope, dissolving courage
Life a hidden meaning
No will to strive forward
No reason to live

Vulgar degradation of reason
A never ceasing unbeatable enemy
Weaklings toil along the easier route
Bowing down in front of death
Others spiralling down a gaping black hole
A hole stretched to infinity

Freelance Writer : Ruan van Vliet

Post by **neon_chameleon** » 13 Mar 2004, 19:16

I guess it's not one of these rhyming poems, is it?

Otherwise it's good stuff, I guess.

Not sure how many pcf-forum-er's are into poetry,though.

STaLK3R · Post by **STaLK3R** » 13 Mar 2004, 19:51

Modern poems are written in free verse, meaning they have no rhyming or particular format. I just posted my poem because I liked it, and it's a breath of fresh air into the forum. Thanks though

Slasher · Post by **Slasher** » 13 Mar 2004, 19:58

More a song than poem... dunno where to post else...

"We're gonna hang them all,
We're gonna hang them all,
We dont know who's guilty
so where gonna hang them all"

based on classic tune... Cant pace name... someone please help me!

STaLK3R · Post by **STaLK3R** » 13 Mar 2004, 21:32

strong words...

Sorry, can't help you

Post by **neon_chameleon** » 13 Mar 2004, 21:45

Hey Slasher, help you with what exactly? With trying to find the name of the tune or the fact that you wanna "hang them all" ?

Post by **Iceblade** » 13 Mar 2004, 21:55

You make me wanna cry

NOT

Iceblade

freakno1 · Post by **freakno1** » 14 Mar 2004, 17:58

I write this a while ago . Any comments welcome and yes i know ...

Am I addicted to you

I look into a mirror and into my own eyes and see the emptiness than I feel every day that I live every second I breath every millisecond I am without you .

I look into peoples eyes , some are happy some sad and some are not who they pretend they are . I look into their eyes and wonder whether they can see into my eyes , can they see me ? I try harder not to let them see me so that they cant see who I am today .

I am empty without you ; I can see the light in your eyes that would light the darkness inside me .

Today I realized that your light has become corrupted by love for another , I realize that the fear of losing you that has stopped me from confessing my love to you has caused you to fall for another .

The pain I feel is fear that causes emptiness . The fear of feeling pain causes me not to feel emotions witch causes the emptiness and darkness . Therefore it hurts to love you and it hurts to be without you .

I am addicted to you .?

Post by **Iceblade** » 14 Mar 2004, 19:00

You just made my baby boy cry, shame on you.

Iceblade

Slasher · Post by **Slasher** » 14 Mar 2004, 22:20

ah...

"A hunting we will go
a hunting we wil go
hey ho a cheerio
a hunting we will go"

Know do you know the tune I was talking bout??

I heard that thing in a cartoon {Hang them all one}

Was sooooo funny and fitting

Post by **Tel** » 15 Mar 2004, 07:27

"I'm a poet, and I don't even know it."

John_Cena · Post by **John_Cena** » 15 Mar 2004, 09:22

is rap classified as poetry?

Post by **OnlyOneKenobi** » 15 Mar 2004, 13:46

John_Cena wrote:is rap classified as poetry?

Yo! I guess it is, since it rhymes... sometimes... hehe...

bb_matt · Post by **bb_matt** » 15 Mar 2004, 20:26

Dunno - I'm funny about poetry, must admit, I'm not keen on the very introspective "woe is me" dark stuff.

Anyway, here's some crud I've written.

Golden highway blues

He walks the golden highway blues
that lose the strength yet drink the booze
throw up your hands, let freedom rise
for in this life, no compromise !

She rides the silky airless wave
that strides the soul with purple haze
lift up your hearts and close your eyes
for in this life, no compromise !

Together they fly, wisdom and time
Entwined with destiny and laced with wine
so subtle now that gentle kiss
that cures all ills in tragic bliss ...

The gift of the sun

My god it's such a gritty world
where dust forms all the time
Oil and spit make up the glue
that binds it all with grime

The cleanest room reveals in cracks
the dirt that can get through
The dusty shelf above our heads
aquires a pungent hue

A drugeons task impossible
a lifetimes work's not done
so lets forget the gritty stuff
and go enjoy the sun !

My TV Set

My Evil Television Set,
Shiny old and little respect.
Shouting bloody carefree in the ear,
my fantasy lives an uncertain cure.

Dithering idiot on the phone,
unbalanced, crazy, alone.

First baby in on it - shouting your name.
Robust, Robot, Control.

Staying out the mile, awhile -
revisiting goals and concentrating, alleviating, inebriated....

STaLK3R · Post by **STaLK3R** » 21 Mar 2004, 09:46

I like THE GIFT OF THE SUN. Very good...

John_Cena · Post by **John_Cena** » 26 Mar 2004, 12:56

Kher-za · Post by **Kher-za** » 26 Mar 2004, 13:10

Post by **Y0da** » 26 Mar 2004, 13:14

Now I know why I don't like John Cena

John_Cena · Post by **John_Cena** » 26 Mar 2004, 13:23

Kher-za · Post by **Kher-za** » 26 Mar 2004, 13:28

Y0da wrote:Now I know why I don't like John Cena

say no more

Kher-za · Post by **Kher-za** » 26 Mar 2004, 14:20

so how do we remove that unsightly blemish from this thread

^^

STaLK3R · Post by **STaLK3R** » 27 Mar 2004, 15:04

Rap is rubbish. No offense

It has no substance, is meaningless and relates to absolutely nothing of value. This is not true for all genres of music, there are exceptions. Rock, for example, is one of the exceptions. Listen to the words next time and you'll figure out how much meaning it has.

Psych0_Cr1tt3r · Post by **Psych0_Cr1tt3r** » 27 Mar 2004, 15:12

I hope you got payed for writing such rubbish, else ... you need to get a life.

STaLK3R · Post by **STaLK3R** » 27 Mar 2004, 15:58

Kher-za wrote:so how do we remove that unsightly blemish from this thread ^^

We can ask Cameron to delete the post, because that post is truly horrific, in more ways than one. I just don't want him to lock the thread.

bb_matt · Post by **bb_matt** » 27 Mar 2004, 19:57

Anyone promoting lyrics like that has to be either a very sad individual or very naive and confused.

Someone cut of his oxygen supply,
he's thieving air from the big blue sky,
a rap attack that makes us sick,
with 'lyrics' that show he's totally thick.